2 weeks ago I presented my 3 ideas that received a mixed bag of criticism. One Lecturer was completely hung up on my lack of story (Which was written but I described it in a rather roundabout way which was very confusing), he made it very clear I needed to re-work the story. and the another gave some genuinely good advice and some subtle hints on how to improve my visual stuff. 2 things rang out, "I had to sort out the story, make is easier to understand across the board" and "Re-work the images" For the record, here is a sample of what I first showed.
Over the summer I was working on these and experimented with various things in Photoshop. I sketched and developed the characters and went about creating digital versions but the Photoshop stuff turned out rather flat and underdeveloped. After the presentation I set about redoing all the compositions with a re-written and re-worked story. I also began re-developing and even removing characters. I took all this new stuff and using what I'd learned from the first batch I started on the digital counterparts. Here is what I'll be presenting for Idea 1 - "Mark"
So that's 2 weeks work.
For the 2nd idea "Save The Vidya Gaem". Here's some of the reworked pieces I'll be showing
The stories have been written, the images drawn and the presentation on the way...here goes nothing!